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another originally old comic strip that I decided to refresh a little, but it turned out crap because I rushed it...




and yes, it's random.





Sam (the golden retriver) and Spike(the wolf) (C) Elise M.S. /nocturnalMoTH

Critiques


:iconzaehlas:
I think that you put excellent work into the anatomy, body positioning, and details of the characters. I can't find any technical problems there at all. The comic is more of a sketch, and partially colored, but that adds to the charm of the reading of it even more than if it was fully colored and "fleshed out" per se.

Incredible job on the expressions. You have a good knack for them, and it's really easy to see, in spite of the monologue, what is also going through the characters minds.

The flow of the comic is great. Very easy to read and follow. I had a slight hiccup on the lower left, where I had a tendancy to read the first of the two lower left panels, then drift over to the right panel, in the wrong order. Maybe if the two lower left were arranged above the final panel, side by side, and the final panel was on a line by itself. That could make the entire comic a little too big though. Not sure, but that one issue with the lower lefthand corner is the only problem I have.

Hilarious conversation. One I think every adolescent has thought about at least once. Great little slice of life.

I love this piece. Excellently done, even if you think it was rushed.
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:iconnextthursday:
so funny :) ... love it
:iconviolet-shade:
lol this is so funny

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LS: That's a scary subject to talk about. XD

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:iconchicacereza:
*knis* ^_^

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:iconnightmaresky:
Ohhhhh groooossss. HAHAHA very nice.

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:iconnocturnalmoth:
:giggle: thanks!

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:icongenesis-orbit:
Haha, I'm sure we've all thought about that at some point. I think I almost walked in on my parents one time, I was too stupid to know what was going on though.

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:iconshi-shin-yome:
The thing about considering something you don't want to think about is that you actually think about it longer (when someone says you can't have something, you usually end up wanting that something more). Nice subtle joke there that, I like it. Great job on the design of the characters and the comic's paneling and wording--looks very professional. I too like your use of shading here. Very soft and perfectly executed with this piece. Good work there.

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:iconnocturnalmoth:
thank you so much! :glomp:

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May 13
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May 13, 2009, 4:26:36 PM

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